I liked your story a lot. It's short but it works well and the two characters have chemistry.
Just a question because I searched absolutely everywhere : is there a way to open the safe ? I'm pretty sure I tried all the combinaisons I could guess
There is a way to open the safe. There isn't much to be found in it, just a tad more to add onto the story I felt wasn't necessary for the whole picture. It was more a way for me to practice how this process works in renpy.
Edit 1: Ok, I have just read this entry. Here are my thoughts.
First of all, this VN reminds me of "Hour" (another entry for this jam, made by mayo milkshake) in many aspects. They are both quite short; supernatural elements are part of their worlds; and have the story arranged in a similar way. In "Hour", there is little time to introduce the story before the action gets to its climax (anachronically); while in Wraith there is no time at all, the action starts right from the beginning and never stops until the story ends. It's fast, all climax, which might make the reader feel as if they were not reading the VN from the beginning.
Prose is a mix between internal and external dialogue you would hear from a real person and some symbolical figures used to enhance aesthetics, as if it was a poem. That is something I have hardly seen in other VN's of this jam so far, yet I believe it could use some polishing to be better appreciated.
Concerning theme implementation, it's hard to get it, but I believe it has something to do with expansion of truth, uncovering a secret.
Those are my thoughts on this VN. Now I will give you a rate to boost your performance in this Jam. Thanks for the experience!
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I liked your story a lot. It's short but it works well and the two characters have chemistry.
Just a question because I searched absolutely everywhere : is there a way to open the safe ? I'm pretty sure I tried all the combinaisons I could guess
There is a way to open the safe. There isn't much to be found in it, just a tad more to add onto the story I felt wasn't necessary for the whole picture. It was more a way for me to practice how this process works in renpy.
For the code, it's as simple as counting back.
I loved the LI being presented in such a unique but unsettling way, and the story had no brakes on it. Very lovely submission!
loved it
10th VN I will read from this Jam here we go!
Edit 1: Ok, I have just read this entry. Here are my thoughts.
First of all, this VN reminds me of "Hour" (another entry for this jam, made by mayo milkshake) in many aspects. They are both quite short; supernatural elements are part of their worlds; and have the story arranged in a similar way. In "Hour", there is little time to introduce the story before the action gets to its climax (anachronically); while in Wraith there is no time at all, the action starts right from the beginning and never stops until the story ends. It's fast, all climax, which might make the reader feel as if they were not reading the VN from the beginning.
Prose is a mix between internal and external dialogue you would hear from a real person and some symbolical figures used to enhance aesthetics, as if it was a poem. That is something I have hardly seen in other VN's of this jam so far, yet I believe it could use some polishing to be better appreciated.
Concerning theme implementation, it's hard to get it, but I believe it has something to do with expansion of truth, uncovering a secret.
Those are my thoughts on this VN. Now I will give you a rate to boost your performance in this Jam. Thanks for the experience!